Thursday, November 29, 2007

LOST ...PISTOL

Joel Julien of the Express, we'll give you a few seconds to figure out what's wrong with the opening sentence of your story "Lawyer faces jail for losing pistol".

"AN attorney was found guilty of the charge of negligently losing his Bareta pistol and 22 rounds of .380 ammunition in the Port of Spain Fourth Magistrates' Court yesterday."

Figured it out yet?

The way your sentence is structured suggests that the lawyer lost his pistol in the Port of Spain court yesterday, and not that he was sentenced in the court after losing the pistol.